Friday, September 18, 2009

Day 2 exemplars - please read

Please read a 6,3,1 for each of the below
http://www.nysedregents.org/testing/engre/eng-609/eng-rg-two-a-609s.pdf

http://www.nysedregents.org/testing/engre/eng-609/eng-rg-two-b-609s.pdf

What did reading these essays help you understand about the task? What do suspect is being tested in these tasks?

What standards must you master to be successful?
http://www.nylearns.org/

please comment to this link for Monday... we will be talking about this in class on Monday.  Please make sure to bring your notebook and a pen and an independent reading book.

44 comments:

donna said...

hi msm sackstein my computer cant open these files because they are internet explorer

Unknown said...

They helped me to understand and to see what is rally required to achieve a six. They showed me how detailed you need to be and what typed of language to use. For these essay's i believe that they are testing the knowledge of the test-er. To make sure that each student knows what needs to be known. Standards that must be known to be successful are : a good and wide vocabulary, clear and thorough paragraphs that are also clearly detailed.

Anastasia Ioannou said...

These files helped me to understand what I need to do to recived a level six. They showed me how to put my thoughts together and how to organize my work.

Anonymous said...

Ms. Sackstein what do we have to read, do you mean the chart that has the levels or a 6, 3, and 1 or pages 6,3, and 1 ?

Victoria Eng said...

This helped me understand and see what I need to achieve a six. It showed me that I have to be detailed in what im writing. It showed me that I need to hav my thoughts together so I can get my work organized.

Edina Kay said...

Ms.Sackstein, every time I click on it, it always says my internet stops working, then it close the windows so I can't read it.

meagan betances said...

meagan betances period#1

what did reading these essays help you understand about the task?
you have to be direct with your explanations but at the same time be very detailed with what you are saying

what do you suspect is being tested in these tasks?
i thought you just wanted to see where we are at in answering and writing essays

what standards must you master to be successful?
i have to improve my vocabulary, have a neater writing style and format, add more detail where needed, learn how to measure out my time to use it wisely.

meagan betances period#1

monicaaa S. (: said...

1. it helps me understand that i have to do exactly what the directions ask me to do and to provide as much details as possible. also, it helps me understand that my paragraphs and info should be clear and organized.

2. they are testing to see if the student is capable of writing a complete essay in a given amount of time. also, to see if the students can follow the task.

3. the standards that we must master in order to be successful are to know a wide variety of advance vocabulary, clear and organized and paragraphs, details from the texts if given, follow directions correctly, and a good understanding of the text.

-Monica Sharma (:

Raisa B. said...

These examples helped me to understand that a level 6 essay must be very detailed, include insightful connections and use structure/correct grammar.

I think that the ability to write a level 6 essay in 45 minutes is being tested in the task.

The standards I have to master in order to be successful are the structure of my response, vocabulary, ability to stablish connections and clear understanding of the text.

Anonymous said...

Reading these essays help me understand what to do. I now understand You have to pick one of these quotes and not both for starters. I also know how I can write the introduction. I also know what I can write in my paragraphs like, what the story is about and how I can compare the book to the quote etc.

I think the standards are being tested in the tasks. Like listeinng reading writing etc.

The only standard I really need to work on is organizing my paragrahs and such. (If that is a standard.)

joseph Ebiotu period 1

Anonymous said...

By reading the level 6 essay I was able to understand what is expected and what a student needs to do to achieve the grading. By writing the essay you are being tested to see how much you know about the task as possible, be able to create controlling ideas and have specfic evidence to support each idea. The format of the essay must be coherent and easy to read, and language must be wide and engaging. Standards that we must master is developing a wide and sophisticated vocab, finding relevant evidence, and creating clear ideas.

Anonymous said...

When I first read the level 6 essay, I didn't think there was much to it. After rereading it, I saw how clear and easy to understand it was. Also, I learned that to write a level 6 essay, it also taught me that I have to read directions and also to make sure that my essay stays on track and has flow. Without these essentials, it would probably be a 4 or less. Standards that we have to master would probably be being more organized, having more sophisticated vocabulary and staying on track.

Erik Kim Period 1.

Jenna S. said...

- Reading the essays helped me to understand that i must follow the exact directions & complete all that is being asked of me, plus more! I need to include a great amount of details, and use complex vocabulary. Lastly, my essay should have a clear focus.

- I believe writing a good quality essay in a short time period is being tested of the students. Along with writing the essay, all criteria needs to be met.

- I believe the standards we must meet include developing a clear focus, writing in an organized fashion, using adult-like vocabulary, using topic sentences & using specific details from the context.

danielle said...

What did reading these essays help you understand about the task? What do suspect is being tested in these tasks?

Reading these essays made me realize that we are mainly being tested on our understanding of texts and literary elements. They want to see how well we can draw from passages given and literature outside the test and connect them to each other and draw conclusions about each.

I have also noticed the major difference between a level 6 and 1 essay. A level 1 essay shows that the person has little to no understanding of the question.

What standards must you master to be successful?

To be successful, a person would have to master writing in depth and comprehending the meaning of both the passages and the tasks given. They would need to know about literary elements and have a sophisticated vocabulary. In addition, they would need to know a wide range of books to draw characters from.


Danielle Period 8

Anonymous said...

-Reading the essays helped me understand that a level 6 essay is detailed and includes everything that is being asked. Reading the essays also showed me what i have to do to earn a 6 and that i have to follow the directions and answer what is asked.
-Writing the essay in a short period of time is what is being tested of the student.
-The standards that we must meet are to have a expanded vocabulary and a lot of knowledge of books, and writinq stuff in an organized way that has a structure. -Christian Segura

Anonymous said...

Reading the essays helped me understand that every direction and tasks must be followed in order to reach the level of a 6. The essay should have a lot of evidence of the text and also to have a lot of details. I also need to stay on topic and have higher level of vocabularies.
Writing a good quality essay in a short time is to test if the student can develop a clear understanding of the task they were given and to write a complete essay with it.
The standards I must approach is writing a organized essay, using complex vocabularies and have a clear idea and focus.


Alex Bao 203 Period 2

Michelle Xia said...

These essays help me understand how I should organize and write my essays. How I need to stay on task and make it descriptive and interesting. Most importantly, this shows me what a level 6 essay looks and what standards I have to meet to get that.

Standards I need to master to get an outstanding grade is that I need to think hard about what the task is asking me to do and how I can use texts to back up my opinion. It also explains how I need to find the appropriate language for all different types of audiences.

-michelle xia

Maria said...

this showed me what i have to do to get a six on the essay and how to make it as good as possible

Sara Touzard said...

Reading these essays helped me understand that the students were asked to write an essay on a paragraph they were given and relate it to there lives. It showed me that I need to reach a level 6 by orgainizing my thoughts so that I can make an engaging intro, detailed body, and an ending that wrapts it all up. I learned that I have to go back to the passage to find evidence of what I am trying to prove. I need to check my spelling and grammer to make sure I use paragraphs for new ideas.

Sara Period: 2

Avi Solkoff said...

As I looked through these essays, I got a better understanding of what is needed to be done to accomplish and achieve a Level 6 on the ELA regents.I would have to agree with what everybody has said that there are certain elements that seperate you from the 1's and 6'.
You must have all of the qualities that contribute to an essay from meaning and interpretation of the text to Language Use such as vocab and figurative language. I know I am not ready for the test at the moment and hopefully we will be practicing these skills to help us pass and achieve our expectations for the ELA regents whether it be June 2010 or 2011.

dajamoal said...

The essays posted will truly improve my skills as a writer. I will continue to refer to them.

Moses Allred
Class: 202
ELA period 2

Jessye Pragen said...

Reading these essays helped me understand that the students were asked to write an essay on a paragraph they were given and relate it to there lives. In order to reach a lever six i must organize my thoughts so i can make up an engaging intro, descriptive body and an ending that ties the body together. I must check to see if I use evident clearly and state where it is it located through out the passage.

Jessye Pragen
PD.8

Isabela said...

After reading these essays i learned what level 6 essays are like, and i got a idea of what is expected from to to acheive this level 6 grade. i learned u have to be very well detailed, and provied exactly what they want, in the best possible way you can provide it. I also must be organized in my writing i must think of a good intro, body, and ending that basically summarizes what i have been talking about throught the essay. Also i learned i must state were i found the information like what sentance on what page of the passages.

-isabela janashvili
period 8

brenttttt said...

i learned what level six essays are like after reading these essays and i also now understand whaat is expected to get a level 6. in order to get a 6, you have to be very detailed, organized, and creative in your work.

brent owens
period 1

Mary Bella Torosyan said...

this helped me to understand a level 6 essay should be
1. detailed
2. it should include insightful connections
3. have good structure and correct grammar.

If I work hard enough I should be able to write a level 6 essay during the time of the regents.

the standards that everyone should have a good understanding of what they are reading.

robin o. said...

This helped me better understand what a 6 essay looks like and how its different from what I am used to writing. I feel that will practice over time i can achieve a 6 essay for the English regents.

donna said...

What did reading these essays help you understand about the task?

Reading these essays helped me understand that the essay must answer what the task is looking for. and the answer shouldn't be something like what the task was asking, it should answer it exactly! you should also have it organized, have perfect grammar, and good use of good vocabulary words.

What do suspect is being tested in these tasks?

I think what is being tested is whether or not you can follow the task and answer what it is asking for in a complete detailed organized response and in a time limit.

What standards must you master to be successful?

I think the standards you must master to be successful are defiantly following the direction perfectly, and doing exactly what the task asks. You should also be able to make useful intelligent connections in your essay from the passage they give you. It also should be organized.

AV said...

These files showed me that writting a level six essay dosen't just magicly happen, but there are a lot of standards that need to be met, like the actual analyzing of the piece, to write a good essay based on that.


Andrew Villa

Amanda Brandell said...

reading these essays helped me understand that the students were asked to write an essay from the paragraph they received and to relate it to their lives. to reach a level six, i have to organize my thoughts into an engaging intro, descriptive body and an ending that brings everything together. then i need to check that i use evidence clearly and state where it is located throughout the passage.

Brianna Hungerford said...

Reading these files helped me understand what is expected of me if I want to get a level six. It explains how I must organize my thoughts into an engaging piece and how detailed I should be. It also explained how I should check to make sure I have included all the components into my essay and that it is comprehensible.

Zoe said...

These helped me understand what I need to do to get a six. You have to be organized, detailed and creative.

Rosemarie W said...

Reading the essays really helped me get an understanding of how much effort goes into a level 6 essay and how little effort goes into a level 1 essay. One thing that stood out to me was the writer of the level 6 essay really seemed to know what they were talking about and the writer of the level 1 essay didn't really elaborate too much, probably because they did not know how (they didn't have a complete understanding.).

I also learned that the standards I have to master to be successful are the ablility to organize my work in a relevant order and I also had to be able to elaborate my thoughts and give a full analysis.

sophia said...

From reading these essays, I learned a lot about the difference between each level grade you could get on an essay. I think learned that to achieve a level 6, it is important to organze your thoughts clearly, give detailed explanations in the essay, and not only to include all the information that is asked but to include extra information aswell.

The standards that I need to master to be successful are to organize my thoughts more clearly. I need to take more time to plan out my essay, which would help me organize my thoughts into the task. I also need to stop summarizing the information, and to analyze the information instead.

Anonymous said...

This shows me how to get a six like you would have to use sophisticated language and show your ideas clearly etc. The standards that I need to be successful is to use more sophisticated vocabulary rather than very simple vocabulary. I alos have to organize my thoughts and ideas.

adogirl said...

These essays made me find what is really required to achieve a level 6 essay. IT said what kinds of devices I need to make a good essay.
The standards I need to have is strong vocab and an idea of organizing my thoughts and ideas to make the essay make sense.

Allison OHagan
Period 1

Opal said...

Reading these essays helped me learn what the people who grade this are looking for. It helped me understand what I needed to do. I think I what I need to cheive that goal of a level 6 essay will be grammer and vocabulary. Also I think that i need information. Information might be a big part of this kind of essays and informtion is something that is lack on.

maggie todaro said...

Reading this helped me understand the criteria for a specific assignment, and what the people who mark the papers look for. I learned that I have to focus on expanding my vocabulary inputting those new words into my work so that it's more advanced. I also now completely get how you analyze the task and how that analysis will help you write. If you don't understand what you have to write about, how can you even write it, you know?

-Maggie Todaro

Shannon Doran said...

These files helped me understand what I need to do to recieve a Level 6. It also showed me how to organize my work. It also shows what is expcted of me when I write my essays.

-Shannon Doran. Pd. 1

Marc said...

These documents have really helped me to see what I need to do to get a level 6 essay. I have learned that I have to focus on expanding my vocabulary between now and the day of the test. I also must be able to organize my writing so the essay will be organized and make sense.

Alyssa Marie Longo :) said...

After reading the chart and the essays it helped me to see that I need to work on in order to get a 6. I believe i would have to be open to new vocabulary and more organized.

Mike D. said...

After reading ove the files, I was able to see how to aquire a six. The link showed me i need to have detail in my writing, use strong vocabular words, and be able to make connections.

angela said...

reading a level six essay was very different than reading a level 3 or 1 essay. The level 6 essay is sophisticated, great use of vocabulary, shows the level of understanding of the piece of literature and the task. Also like you have to be detailed with your response to the essay question but you have to stay with the task.
I think that we were giving this assignment because the teacher wants us to compare our work and see were we're at, since most of us are probably at level 3 looking at a level 6 essay encourages us to d better and improve our literature skills.
The literary elements you need are to improve vocabulary, having a neater writing style and learn how to organize your paragraphs is important to us.

Anonymous said...

The essays helped me understand how to write a good essay. They showed me the difference between what a level 6, level 3 and level 1 essay are and what to do and what not to do while writing these types of essays.

biancaj1.com said...

This helped to me to see how to achieve a level six, i have to be detailed make connections, show that i have a good vocabulary,so this helped me.